suggests that there are "few tales which would not be improved by the addition of the phrase 'suddenly, a shot rang out.'"
Decide for yourself as we alter the opening lines of . . .Desire
by Lindsay Ahl
I have such a craving for one of those small cold bottles of Concord grape juice that I leave Michael's house at around six in the morning and head toward the 7-Eleven, which is always open twenty-four hours a day. Suddenly, a shot rings out.